A few suggestions
1. You can use an old-fashioned way of using the Fool as the last card, after the World. It doesn't have to be the first card. It can be the 'return' of the journey to an innocent phase, the young girl looking at the pigeons and perhaps someone seeing her will be reminded of their own innocent days...and thus remember the journey.
2. The Magician card can be the 'Artist' and be the first in the sequence.
3. In the autumn or during days where stormclouds and wind will diffuse the amount of sunlight, even the pigeons at stoplights will sometimes launch into a migratory 'v' wheeling pattern of flight--I don't know if you have seen this, but once one pigeon goes into flight, a series will follow it. Correct me if I am wrong, but I am certain this is the pigeons, not the mourning doves or sparrows or ravens that I normally see.
It could be our pigeons in the California area of the U.S. are not so well-fed, and some tend to keep some of their wilder aspects?
Original post:
So I'm thinking about reworking the Fool card. since it is the first card of the deck it will set the mood for the rest, and I want to get the feel right. I'm also thinking of changing the title to "the artist", some one who's all about the journey and discovery but not neccessarily left brained enough to comprehend the consequences. Please hit me with some changes you think would make this work better.